Please correctmy writting and give me your ideas....

[donald00701]

:lol:     English is very important for ourlves because it can make our lives more comfortable in the future.It's almost useful in our daily lives to make bussiness ,communicaton with foriegners and also helpful to get us to know the modern world like the technology...Unfortunately this language is not very easy to learn,It depends on ourselves that we invest our time on it.So i mean that as we want to reach our goal, first we have to have right decission if we really want or not.If we don't understand this course ,we live just like blind man because we don't know the modern outside world.How can we talk pr make our bussiness with other oversea countries??How can we write application form for applying a good job??? The answer is no!!!! Most of the companies' managers, the head of orgasation and other good job's employers ,always find their employees with the good quality of knowledge, especailly with other language.But the most common is English.So most of all is English is a  wonderful ship which can take us across the sea and untill it reach the brilliant coast.When we reach there our lives will be better or best.But when we don't try to pick it up or just know allittle bit of it, all our hope will become just our guessing game.
           At the end all we know is neccesary of English language.A lot of students that learn it as second language,always have some terrible feeling ,instead of me too because in my opinion, i think that when we just learn it first, it's not easy.It's a new thing ,so we have alot of mistakes and problems which we can't count.By these ideas we must try it more and more, one day we will be a better student.
                                                                  :wink::Mr DAVUTH :wink:

[jupiter]

Hi donald00701  

The following is my idea on ur writing:

English is very important for ourlves because it can make our lives more comfortable in the future.It's almost useful in our daily lives to make bussiness ,communicaton with foriegners and also helpful to get us to know the modern world like the technology...Unfortunately this language is not very easy to learn,It depends on ourselves that we invest our time on it.So i mean that as we want to reach our goal, first we have to have right decission if we really want or not.If we don't understand this course ,we live just like blind man because we don't know the modern outside world.How can we talk pr make our bussiness with other oversea countries??How can we write application form for applying a good job The answer is no!!!! Most of the companies' managers, the head of orgasation and other good job's employers ,always find their employees with the good quality of knowledge, especailly with other language.But the most common is English.So most of all is English is a wonderful ship which can take us across the sea and untill it reach the brilliant coast.When we reach there our lives will be better or best.But when we don't try to pick it up or just know allittle bit of it, all our hope will become just our guessing game.
At the end all we know is neccesary of English language.A lot of students that learn it as a second language,always have some terrible feeling ,instead of me too because in my opinion, i think that when we just learn it first, it's not easy.It's a new thing ,so we have alot of mistakes and problems which we can't count.By these ideas we must try it more and more, one day we will be a better student.

Davuth, ur idea is OK but ur writing is not so good, so it makes ur idea unclear to the readers. You have some problems with spelling, punctuation, and sentence connection.

Please consider ur mistakes that are underlined.

I would welcome ur other writing.
Jupiter

PS. Pratice makes perfect, so please write it more and more.

[Keo Somala]

Hello Davuth and Jupiter,

I hope that you don't mind my correction below. Please see it as follows!

Green means " spelling mistakes".

It's almost useful in our daily lives to make bussiness ,communicaton with foriegners and also helpful to get us to know the modern world like the technology...

...first we have to have right decission if we...

.......we live just like blind man (u forgot to use "an ariticle") because we don't know the modern outside world....

How can we write application form for applying a good job???

A lot of students that learn it as a second language.........( we should use " who" not " that " here in writing.

It's a new thing ,so we have a lot of mistakes

. "To make a mistake/mistakes sounds more natural or correct than " to have a mistake/mistakes" here.

I agree with Jupiter. You can try to improve your English through reading newspaper, looking up unknown words in a dictionary and going on writing and posting here. There is no problem, you have done a good job  by showing your writing to us. I hope you can show us another one. We are proud of you as you are the first one who is brave to post ur essay here. Really, we are happy to rate your essay too. But first please revise it  :wink: because it helps.